This is something I wrote for my advanced poetry class in college. My assignment – ” The last poem before your life is snuffed (yes – they wanted it to rhyme)”
Lachrymose clouds holding back, letting the sun gently flirt,
My sandaled feet gently burdening the dirt;
My flickering orange sweeps back the dark tresses of the night,
I ponder chewing on my cedar enslaving graphite;
This shall not sing of my first school dance or climbing my first fence,
It shall not speak of my father walking away trailing my innocence;
It will not hail me for pulling through pain and despair
It does not chastise me for losing my sanity or being unfair;
It’s neither an ode to my laurels nor a dirge for those lost,
Not a chronicle of superlatives or curses tossed.
My swan song sweet earth – Let it be not sublime;
My swan song, gentle Charon – let it be, but a fool’s rhyme.
Poetry was never my thing.. and I am happy to say I haven’t understood a word!! 😀
I like Urdu poetry though.. or even Hindi.. and Tamil.. ahem! Maybe that just means I don’t think much of English poetry, because its quite simple and in the face.. When my dad goes into Urdu poetry, i don’t understand a word, but it sounds profound.. and I attach poetry with profoundity – i.e. – something I don’t understand!
So, by that explanation – this is an awesome poetry, gal ! 😀
“fools rhyme”?? highly unlikely.. though with almost nil ideas on creating poetry.. it does come through as very interesting piece written with a nice play of words.. Love the sound of it and the flow of words….
Iam so stupid to understand poems, and so would avoid commenting on them.
Anyway, you have been tagged :
http://vimalsparadise.blogspot.com/2009/02/19-19.html
This is my poem:
Roses are Red,
My undies are Blue,
That fact that poems are overrated,
Is so Fuckin True!! 😀 😀
i would give poetry a pass any day 😉 sorry i have this manufacturing defect in me..which doesnt let me understand anything in it 😀
iambic pentameter – now what was that???
@Apar – Yes we should! But I’ll be busy with my chaffeur
@Aaarti – You googled it? It has been years and I still haven’t bothered!
woww.. that poem is deep n intense girl…. and yes, it rhymes!!! 🙂
and i had to google iambic pentameter…hehehe…
woww.. that poem is deep n intense girl…. and yes, it rhymes!!! 🙂
Aah…me the hear about iambic pentameter!! Let us watch a movie Dead Poets’ Society when you come home next time 🙂
You rhymed!!!! 😀
Amit: Thanks.. I think!
My prof didn’t think so… I quote “How dare you make a mockery of the bards? I told you, I wanted the poem in Iambic pentameter!”
And I remember thinking “an iambic what’sthewho?”
Its beautiful…all the part that I was able to understand! 😛